Hidden In Plain Sight…

jhc-clock

Dearest Richard,

If you find this letter, then perhaps there is a chance for us after all.

Do you remember when and where I bought the clock? A bric-a-brac impulse in happier times.

Each hour the little man emerges from his arched door and chimes the hour amidst a tinny fanfare. I imagine he was important once, but like so many things, time marginalised him into an anonymous oddity. In that respect he and I are very much alike. I have placed this missive in his arms. Every sixty minutes he will offer you a way back, if you have the eyes to see and the heart to remember…and if not…

 

Written for: Friday Fictioneers

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20 responses to “Hidden In Plain Sight…

  1. I liked “I imagine he was important once, but like so many things, time marginalised him into an anonymous oddity. In that respect he and I are very much alike”. Well observed!

  2. That aspect of something becoming less important as it changes ownership is thought-provoking.

  3. if you have the eyes to see and the heart to remember…and if not…
    Brilliant!!

  4. Great linking the narrator and the tiny clock guy.

  5. Abhijit Ray

    The author and clock man are ageing and losing their unique identity.

  6. What a brilliant idea! And beautifully executed.

  7. Lovely epistolary story, Martin. The writing is simply beautiful.

  8. felt like three themes impacted me – the romantic love side, the personality of the folks (bric-a-brac impulse in happier times) and societal change (time marginalised him into an anonymous oddity) which I sorta addressed in my fiction too.
    anyhow, I felt a sense of beauty in reading this

  9. I think that sometimes there are those tiny details that are the only links to the past…

  10. Great clock and love the story.

  11. I don’t need to analyse it to like it. I like it!

  12. I love so many things in the story, you really tickled my imagination. Just lovely!

  13. This was so beautiful and tender, Martin. I really loved the letter format, which like the aging author and tin man, is an anachronism. Well done! I hope he gets the response he desires.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

  14. Great take on the prompt. 👍

  15. Compelling! Now I’m curious as to what he’s meant to remember.

  16. A beautifully crafted story, loved the imaginative link between the real man and the little clock man – also liked the reflective message of your story.

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